This is my latest writing about the birds we saw at camp:
It was a mild day at Lochmara Lodge. One of the animals we observed was the red crowned kakariki. I got asked if I wanted to feed the birds but I was so focused on the three turtles that I said "No". Right after I had said no our groups swapped over and it was the next group's turn.
I like your vocabulary. You need to work on punctuation. Good job.
ReplyDeleteAmelia, I like the changes you made following Sammy's comment to you. In future make sure you tell me what you see, smell, touch and feel. Paint a picture in my mind.
ReplyDeletei remember that day
ReplyDeleteI like what you wrote a the pic
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